Looks good! However there is one thing that I feel is slightly off. The little boy is not unaware he is insulting women, he knows it's an insult, he just doesn't connect that insult with someone he knows a loves. Which means that it has just become so ingrained in culture that it's easy to say and not apply to someone close to you because you know they aren't weak and don't do those things but he's heard it so it must be true. Great job though!! :)
Your outline looks really good. You have a lot of really good, developed arguments. I think you brought in a lot of crucial and diverse arguments, like about the choice in outfits and camera angles.
I think your outline is really thorough and brings up some critical and interesting points. However, I think you should consider analyzing the commercial aspect of the #LikeAGirl campaign and see how this affects the message as a whole. Great job!
It is an alright outline, however I did notice some things. First, for somethings, especially the third body paragraph, you give observations on what you see, but don't provide much analysis/inference to the "why" part of it. Second, be sure to relate the body paragraphs back to the thesis. Last, be sure to include a conclusion paragraph to wrap the paper up.
Looks good! However there is one thing that I feel is slightly off. The little boy is not unaware he is insulting women, he knows it's an insult, he just doesn't connect that insult with someone he knows a loves. Which means that it has just become so ingrained in culture that it's easy to say and not apply to someone close to you because you know they aren't weak and don't do those things but he's heard it so it must be true. Great job though!! :)
ReplyDeleteYour outline looks really good. You have a lot of really good, developed arguments. I think you brought in a lot of crucial and diverse arguments, like about the choice in outfits and camera angles.
ReplyDeleteI think your outline is really thorough and brings up some critical and interesting points. However, I think you should consider analyzing the commercial aspect of the #LikeAGirl campaign and see how this affects the message as a whole. Great job!
ReplyDeleteIt is an alright outline, however I did notice some things. First, for somethings, especially the third body paragraph, you give observations on what you see, but don't provide much analysis/inference to the "why" part of it. Second, be sure to relate the body paragraphs back to the thesis. Last, be sure to include a conclusion paragraph to wrap the paper up.
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